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Post by Maledicus on Sat Apr 04, 2009 4:21 am

This is pretty much where we're going to write our story as soon as we are done discussing everything that needs to be discussed. In other words, this is where the action happens.
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Post by Spike Matthews on Sun Jun 21, 2009 2:53 pm

Great start!

I know it's not needed fer the entry, but ye've not given the time of year - can we make it early-mid Spring? What I'm writing depends on there having been a tough winter.
Also, Jarvis obviously knows Ralkin. Please, can we make it that nobody else knows of him OR of his involvement until he joins up with the group. Note that I have left it open. Your characters may know Ralkin, or know of him, but not know of his involvement
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Post by Spike Matthews on Sun Jun 21, 2009 4:21 pm

That was fun. I was going to leave it longer, but I thought I had better get Ralkin in there, even if it was right at the end!
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Mon Jun 22, 2009 11:30 am

Nicely done. Already 've got me wondering where this is going. Also, keeping Ralkin as someone new to the group...or at least someone that was not obviously involved makes for some interesting plot points.
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Post by Spike Matthews on Mon Jun 22, 2009 1:28 pm

By the way, just to make it clear, Ralkin will be a last-minute entrance to the group. Moaning as usual... lol
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Fri Jun 26, 2009 11:08 pm

Ok...Zaranda's opening scene is nearly done. If someone else wants to go before me, that's fine. I'll wait and post after. Otherwise, I can post hers right away since it doesn't involve anyone else.
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Post by Spike Matthews on Sat Jun 27, 2009 1:42 am

Go for it.
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Post by Spike Matthews on Tue Jun 30, 2009 1:39 pm

Another storming entry there. Welcome, Mnes, to the production line!
That was a different pacing to what I'm used to - a sort of urgent, staccato pace, making Jarvis to be on edge as he acted and looked about him.
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Wed Jul 01, 2009 11:09 am

As always, nice detail Mnes! Looks like 'ol Jarvis has quite a dilemma on his hands.
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Post by mnesomeye on Fri Jul 03, 2009 12:41 pm

Thank you! ^_^
Who's writing the next one, by the way?
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Post by Spike Matthews on Fri Jul 03, 2009 1:01 pm

I'll have a go. Could be interesting, trying to keep the pace from shifting too radically, despite a complete change of scene and character(s).
Give me a day or two, yeah?
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Fri Jul 03, 2009 1:03 pm

Sounds good, Spike. Been waitin' to see what Ralkin's going to do next.
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Post by Spike Matthews on Sat Jul 04, 2009 3:04 pm

Done and dusted.
Two things to note, however:
I have had to alter the mechanism by which Ralkin's portal stone work. They now work by tapping onto something, as opposed to merely touching flesh. However, that something could still be another person/creature, so the defensive aspect of the staff's portal stone still works - what do ye think's going to happen when a portal is opened on a living thing? It's either going to be messy or portally. Maybe both.

The other thing is to say that Ralkin isn't portalling into the action here. I don't want the wolf to be involved in that side of it. Nor do I want it dead, so if anyone writes it, please remember that.

Oh yeah - I don't know if you noticed what I did with the title of each of my sections. Rather than have the 'meanwhile' bit in the body of the text I thought it best to go in the topic part. Mind you, the only way I've found to get that so far is to go back in and use the edit function (the scissors icon)
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Post by Maledicus on Sat Jul 04, 2009 4:19 pm

If you don't use quick reply, you can do that without the edit function. So just press the "post reply" button, right next to "new topic".
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Tue Jul 07, 2009 11:17 am

"the defensive aspect of the staff's portal stone still works - what do ye think's going to happen when a portal is opened on a living thing? It's either going to be messy or portally. Maybe both."

Nice...messy and portally. Where perhaps only part of a person gets portalled? Uggh.

Good to see wolfie and Ralkin getting along rather well. I'm working on the next Zaranda segment, but not sure when I'll be finished. If anyone else wants to go ahead with a different segment, go right ahead (especially if it is to kick off Aran or Savv's adventures).
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Post by Spike Matthews on Sat Jul 11, 2009 5:01 am

Ok, colour me confused.
In the cottage garden, I thought they may have been good guys.
Then I read the ending and they suddenly don't seem so nice.
Oswald definitely seems like someone to be wary of.
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Sat Jul 11, 2009 12:24 pm

I left it up to the reader to guess what the intentions are of the group that is pursuing Zaranda might be instead of making it 100% clear by the end of the segment. I have some ideas on what they might be, but the nature of this storybook is this can go whatever way any of us choose. Whoever wants to tackle Zaranda's next segment gets a chance to expand on who these guys are...or make them even more mysterious, I suppose.
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Post by mnesomeye on Sat Jul 11, 2009 9:14 pm

Just read the last two entires - scary scary! So much action going on... I wonder how everyone's going to meet up? Oh, and by the way - Savv will only appear once a certain set of criteria have been fulfilled. *smirk* That'll keep ya guessing!

And - the wolf rocks. Very Happy Is he Ralkin's new pet, now?

EDIT: Having a total writer's block. I'll come back tomorrow and see if I can do any better...
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Post by Spike Matthews on Sun Jul 12, 2009 2:00 am

Pet? A wolf??
Wolves tolerate humans, generally. This one is a little different, but is most definitely not a pet.
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Post by Spike Matthews on Tue Jul 14, 2009 11:25 am

Mal, that's one hell of an entry. I like the way you had the same situation being seen from two perspectives.

That ending creeped me out a little. There's obviously history behind that little bit, and I'm not sure whether it's left him a little broken-minded...
(I could check his profile, but I don't want to spoil the surprise)
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Post by Maledicus on Wed Jul 15, 2009 7:23 am

Like there's anything about it in his profile! I've got some idea about what happened to him, but I like to keep stuff open and mysterious...
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Wed Jul 15, 2009 9:33 am

Yes, Aran makes an appearance! Nice work, Mal. I liked Jarvis and Aran's hesitation. Creates some good tension when reading it.
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Sat Jul 18, 2009 12:10 am

Ok....new Jarvis segment is up. Aran is there, but did not do the two POVs as Mal had done previously, just Jarvis...and the new guy. Introduced a short-lived or possibly recurring character. DEFINITELY not a main character. I mainly wanted to add an acquaintance of Jarvis' that is outside of theif-takers group.

I nearly did a Ralkin segment this time, but wanted to add some Jarvis elements that I contemplated adding in the opening scene.
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Post by Spike Matthews on Sun Jul 19, 2009 12:08 pm

That was a very varied approach to that segment. I'm going to have to read it more properly once my head clears, but I liked it a lot.

I'm glad you didn't do owt with Ralkin, as I wanted to take care of the wolf before Ralkin gets dragged into this (and dragged, he will be.)
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Post by Ob Thundersnot on Thu Jul 23, 2009 11:43 am

Yeah, it was a varied approach. That first part...not sure exactly what to call it, but it's like hyper-first person, where you are pretty much implanted into the character's head without narration...just raw thoughts, etc. Too much of that, and things get confusing, I think.
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